Curse Azure

Posted on Thursday, February 17th, 2011 at 4:13 am

Curse Azure
Is my poem good or bad? It's just hard.?

Sweet silent symphony, dancing among the trees, music earrings, elasticity. It extends for miles in the big blue ocean, a storm of energy, a tone of frozen ice, volatile over his being. And the cries of the lost fill the air, cursing his murderers, a strange melody. Caress the loss, but leave the work alone, and is proud smile on his lip a boil. Both putrid and Devine. While fast tip through, destroying the life and breath, an endless stream under the blue sky. Crashes and spills, cascading in the air like emeralds. A gift of the virgin. Both nice and cruel. Mardin, does not answer my future questions unless you have something half decent to say. Otherwise, it is wasting time.

A good start if a little rough. If you want to continue with the rhyme scheme, you may want to consider using a traditional form, like a villanelle or sonnet. Given the subject, perhaps a pastoral. If the rhyme is not important, do not write what the meter of each line is something coherent, giving them more or less the same number beats. Listen to your head or read and listen. Try to find a rhythm which is nice. Hope that helps.